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i tilt my head back, and my body floats
gracefully upwards, flipping like a log that
has been dropped headfirst into a river.
i am not in a river, though, the sharp
taste of salt in my mouth is unmistakeably
sea
i can feel my nose burning and salt drying
on my cheeks, and my hair floating away in
ropey tangled strands that will be hell to
brush out when i get home aching and tired
i bob like a loose cork, my arms stretched
outwards, wrists loose, water ebbing, flowing,
skin-pricklingly cold, the seagulls cry and it
is like they have lost something but i have
found everything, everything i need, this
is all that is and this is all that will ever be
and the skin on my fingers is tight and wrinkled
but if i dried up and died like this would it
be so bad?
there is a roaring in my ears and my family
are somewhere near by with cheap K-mart
boogieboards and toddlers with chubby knees
poking out from lycra bathing shorts
maybe
or maybe they are gone now
and all that there is in the world is me
and the coldness of the ocean
and the heat on my upturned face
and the sad cry of the seagulls
somewhere
somewhere
above.
NaPoWriMo - Day Eleven.

The prompt was a sensory poem. Trying to describe a memory and all the feelings and smells and tastes and sounds that went along with it. This happened.
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hannahlily Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
haunting and happy somehow :)
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconwooooplz:
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hannahlily Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:meditate:
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MercyAntebellum Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
are you sure you weren't in a sensory deprivation chamber? xD

good poem. emotive. strong; the language is so that you needn't have put a description at all.
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Would there be seagulls in a sensory deprivation chamber, hmm?

Thank you! I'm glad you like it. :heart:
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MercyAntebellum Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
well i didn't read that part ^^ and i'm sure they'd fit quite well.

^^
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
B-but it was part of the poem... :(
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MercyAntebellum Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oooh xD
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